Tuesday, August 6, 2013

Helen's draft


Misaki glanced over at the ring that Usui had proposed to her with. A small smile had appeared on her face.
 
Later that evening
 
“Usui, where are we going?” Misaki asked
“It’s a surprise.” Usui replied as they walked along the busy street holding hands.
“Are we going to the maid café?” Misaki questioned.
As they walked passed the shops, many windows displayed signs saying Christmas was only a week away.
“Of course not” Usui stressed in a soft tone.
“Why are the lights are off? Should someone be inside? It is not open?” Misaki argued.
“My!, my!, Misaki is full of questions today.” Usui exclaimed.
Misaki blushed. “I’m sorry, I just feel I should study”
Usui sighed in reply, “The entrance examinations are over. We achieved Cambridge University entrance. It is time to relax, ok?”
Misaki accepted.
As they approached the maid café, Usui stopped and asked Misaki.
“I would like you to close your eyes”
Misaki half-jokingly accused Usui “Why? What are you going to do you perverted alien?”
“Are you really going to call me a perverted alien, I am your future husband” He replied in shock.
“Yes, not until you stop acting like one” Misaki stood her ground.
“Fine, just close your eyes then” Usui insisted. She complied.
 
Misaki disliked how Usui won many of their arguments. Although relationships occur positives and negatives, she felt that most aspects of their lives were negative. She worked many hours of the day and night. Overall 2nd place status in school did not seem to interest Usui as he was 1st place. She disapproved.
Usui rushed "Just hold on to my jacket please, since you can not see you must listen to my alluring voice"
"ahh, okay" Misaki could feel her face warm up. (WHY)
Usui’s plan was going as he hoped.
Misaki heard bells jingle that she was familiar with as Usui opened a door.
“You can open your eyes now, Misa-chan" Usui yelled.
"SURPRISE! MISAKI-CHAN AND GOOD LUCK IN STUDYING ABROAD"
“W-w-what?” Her eyes swelled with tears.
Usui had planned a surprise farewell party for Misaki. Usui gathered all her work colleagues, friends and family. He set up balloons, food and a giant banner that said, “GOOD LUCK IN ENGLAND!”
Misaki was shocked “Thank you very much! Everyone.” she bowed to show her appreciation. Everyone cheered in gratitude for Usui and Misaki’s successful relationship. Although some people were sad to see them leave, they were glad the couple was successful.
 
The only person that was unhappy was Misaki’s father. When he returned from Japan, he attempted to create a family, but instead established his own family debt.
“Please Misaki, don’t leave” her father begged.
She stared at her father and replied. “I have my tickets and I leave in two weeks time”
Upon acknowledgement of her thoughts, he gave her his best wishes for her journey abroad. Misaki’s father felt ashamed for his efforts. He felt as if he was never a decent father. However he was still proud of his daughter therefore he persisted that she return and visit.
“Thank you father, I will try” She relieved. 


Misaki thought that everything was perfect as the night went on. She was with people that love her; they wanted her to do her best. Everything was perfect. As the night went on, each person gave the couple their best wishes as they disappeared into the cold wintery night. The couple left for the manager to close up. The couple walked slowly towards Usui’s apartment. Their apartment she corrected herself Their home.
Tora Igarashi finally saw Usui and Misaki walking towards Usui’s apartment. His felt his heart ache. He wanted to be the one to hold Misaki’s hand; he wanted to be the one to be able to hold her the way Usui was able to.

 
 


Please comment, this is still in draft form, I may change it here and there. 



2 comments:

  1. Hi Helen,

    I really like how you have managed to portray such a causal conversation without it sounding forced. I also like how you managed to explain what could have been a really long back story within a sentence. After reading this it made me want to find out where he's taking her!!

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  2. Hi,
    This is good dialogue, really casual and believable, I havnt seen maid sama but I am an avid anime watcher so this has roots in a media that is usually heavy with dialogue so it suits nicely, I may watch this to get a better grasp on the relationship.

    Good work keep it up! :)

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